Her Name – 6th March 2025

~ shaun tenzenmen

Her considered sophisticated smile
careful
An enticing night time jasmine
perfume
Her rosy porcelain skin, fine
china
Her eyes shine bright the prize
clearly
It was all in her name
Allure

The original poem is below, and above is a re-write for dVerse using the WaltMarie form. A convenient coincidence that these two prompts came in the same week.

Her name was Allure
It was in her eyes
– Bright and unclouded
She made herself the prize

Her name was Allure
It was in her skin
– Rosy and yielding
Fashioned from porcelain

Her name was Allure
It was in her perfume
– Curious and enticing
A night time jasmine bloom

Her name was Allure
It was in her smile
– Careful and considered
A sophisticated style

When I was studying to teach English, there were folks from all around the world in the class. One young Chinese lady had taken the English name Allure, which I found quite intriguing. She was a pretty lady, and I’m sure many people did find her name appropriate.
Shared with Moonwashed Weekly Prompt – using the word allure

18 thoughts on “Her Name – 6th March 2025”

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  8. Loved your translation of the original into the Waltmarie, the nuanced change in tone, the definition of ideas, is a study in how the poetic voice influences our perception of the subject.

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