Shaun, you layer mirage-like imagery with sharp critique, conjuring golden villages and rippling waves before cutting to phosphorus heat and bone-strewn paths. The sensory detail—dust, cement, scorched ground—anchors the political charges you set down. It leaves a linger sense of lingers bitter contrasts: leisure dreams built on erasure and ruin. A true mirage, indeed.
A very moving poem Shaun. So much truth wrapped in satire. Love it.
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Thanks Sadje 🙏
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You’re welcome
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Shaun, you layer mirage-like imagery with sharp critique, conjuring golden villages and rippling waves before cutting to phosphorus heat and bone-strewn paths. The sensory detail—dust, cement, scorched ground—anchors the political charges you set down. It leaves a linger sense of lingers bitter contrasts: leisure dreams built on erasure and ruin. A true mirage, indeed.
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Thank you so much 🙏
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Shaun, this piece feels hauntingly vivid—I could really sense the weight of history in lines like “a New Jerusalem, forever a mirage.” 🌌
~David
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Such intelligently constructed layers. A complex piece very well executed.
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Thanks Violet 🙏
Not as popular as an autumnal poem but I’m pretty happy with this one.
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