Shared with dVerse Poetics Tuesday – use a classic opening line as an ending line. I chose Charles Bukowski’s Ham On Rye, ‘The first thing I remember is being under something.’ I’m not familiar with the story but I ended up with the idea of Hank waking from his dreams and memories of the night before.
I was terrified, my sweaty hands shaking a brittle-boned cold heat fever a pillow headache, suffocating on a bilious, swollen tongue
thick with last night
smoky lungs, coughing iron filing lumps of congealed blood bitter, soggy pills in a pail.
She had shimmered in the weak light through the foggy frame whispered strawberries through rotten teeth my ears are catching golden secrets often repeated on other nights in other city lights
As the working men clocked out boots echoing toward small kitchens a small brown bird tapped rhythmically at the window to bring my relief to an end and the first thing I remember is being under something.
Brilliant imagery that really draws us in – the contrast between strawberries and rotten teeth was particularly gripping! Jae
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Thanks Jae 🙏
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Great job, Shaun!
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Cheers Dwight 🙏
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